Wednesday, April 11, 2012

The world's best animal is …



Butterflies are the best animal in the world. The best animal in the world should be interesting and beautiful. Butterflies look amazing and they have many features that no other animal has.

Butterflies are beautiful. They have four wings. Every butterfly has a different pattern and colours on its wings. Some butterflies are so special that people travel to places just to see them. The Ulysses butterfly has beautiful bright blue patterns on its wings. People travel to Mossman Gorge near cairns just to see a Ulysses butterfly.

Butterflies have a special life cycle. Most animals hatch out of eggs or are born live but caterpillars hatch from eggs, grow bigger, then change inside a chrysalis into beautiful butterflies. Some animals change as they grow, like a tadpole changes into a frog, but it doesn't change into a chrysalis first. Some insects like bees change from a pupa into a bee, but bees sting you. So they aren't as good as butterflies.

Butterflies don't hurt anyone or anything. They help nature. When they fly from flower to flower, they take pollen from one plant to another. So they are helping the plants.

Butterflies are very pretty and helpful so that is why butterflies are the best animal in nature.


Use of comparison to establish own point of view, e.g. (i) … have many features that no other animal has and (ii) Most
animals … but butterflies …

Explanations describe some similarities between butterflies and other animals but show negative aspects of other
animals, e.g. …
Some insects like bees change from a pupa into a bee, but bees sting you.
Persuasive purpose: Present evidence

Use of scientific information as evidence for some key points
Use of personal experience and generalised statements about people to elaborate and provide evidence

Persuasive text layout

An example of persuasive text


Text 2: Persuasive purpose: Appeal to the reader’s emotions



Use of highly emotive and evaluative vocabulary



Extensive use of personal “thinking” and “feeling” verbs

Personal pronouns, I, meaning the author, and, they, referring to butterflies, are used throughout